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How can I make it better/descriptive? Need to slow it downThough, there was a sense of hope, through the mist the land formation of the island was visible. Max doubled checked each time he would come to the surface.As the four of them again emerged from beneath another wave, their eyes were bloodshot from the unrelenting salt water. “We need Chatter Swim to do something,” Miranda urged, barely able to speak between her chattering teeth. “I have an idea,” Max sparked. “The island is probably only two miles away now, we could swim.”“Are you crazy? We can barely keep our heads above water,” Sean replied.“Wait what's that?” Jess asked, noticing the enormous hole in the clouds. The rain turned into a light drizzle, and the lightning moved more to the south as the waves started to flatten.“We're in the eye of it,” Max said, a smile crossed his face. “Yes, this is it!” Sean raised his voice, turning towards Max. “The eye has to be bigger than two miles. We can swim!”The four of them swam as hard as they could, even though their energy was excessively low. (What should I put next?”
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